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What is working in the draft has to be the stakes. Allan, though young, could carry a grudge for his brother. The relationship has the potential to sour. I also tried to make the story very believable while in the realm of magical realism. I think that benefitted the story as well. I do feel however that there isn't enough of a conflict. There has to be a bigger conflict in the story since I only have an argument in the beginning which isn't very long at all. I would like to know if it the story still falls in the category of magical realism and if there are any tips as to how I can increase the conflict between Allan and his brother and maybe even January. The plot of the story is: A boy becomes heartbroken by his crush after she picks his older brother. He runs away and finds this mystical underground space for kids to hangout. At this place he meets his "one true love" and mends his heart. My main characters internal conflict is feeling betrayed and taken ...

1.) After having my story work shopped I feel as though it has potential to be very entertaining. Many comments were very positive, and so my confidence with it has grown. 2.) Clarity is the area where I will try to focus on. I have a few characters in my story and comments talked about some slight confusion as to whom was speaking. 3.) Some of the things that went well in the first workshop was the believability of my short story.  My characters appeared as though they were actual people. Also the plot worked well because all the comments praised it for its originality. In workshop #2, I want to see better descriptions, and 4.) Claudia Delvillar, Natasha Garcia and Jeremiah Then, were the most helpful. Author Role-Play a.) My author Carlos Fuentes, was born in Panama City, Panama, on Novemebr 11th, 1928. He moved around a lot because of his fathers job, which meant he grew up in many different Latin America sea. c.) Fuentes became interested in writing after his ...

  a.)    Patty thought he could get one over on me, ha. Poor boy was swimming with lead weights. If the job would have gone down as planned the kid would have made some good money too. O'Toole found him trying to get to London. Patty was shot for his betrayal, and O'Toole gave us more money for the trouble. In the end I'm happy with it all. b.) I chose 3rd person so that I can describe things characters could not. I was able to tell backstory and what my character was thinking. I was very comfortable writing in this point of view. This week I read 2 more stories by W. Somerset Maugham. The ant and the grasshopper, and Mr. know all. I really enjoyed the first story since it had tons of tension and great character development. The second story; Mr. know all felt kind of dull when comparing it to The ant and the grasshopper. Both stories were realistic narrative fiction. In both stories there are characters that people do not like. In the ant and the grasshopper ...

1. I feel as though my story is interesting, which to me means that it is working well. 2. What I believe is not working is the language. I always feel as though I need better choice of words to tell my story. A higher level of language. 3. Some questions id like to have answered about my draft are: Is it engaging? Does it read well? Does it have a strong voice? Does my draft have parts that could be made more economical? 4. My characters internal conflict is honestly something I did not think about. I think it would have added to the story. 5. This draft challenged my writing because I tried to use more imagery and include descriptions of the setting to better immerse the reader. I want to focus on better language. A. In reading two stories from my author: The Verger and The Lotus Eater. I thought both stories had beautiful imagery and were very entertaining. I could see what each character was doing throughout the stories. In The Verger I do not have anything that I disl...

Two male college students sit with laptops in Starbucks enjoying their over priced "artisan" coffee's. And of course they have full beards that disturbingly become soaked in the very same drink they are sipping on. The friend that can be easily described as the leader of all hipsters looks away from his laptop to engage in what some might say is a boring conversation to the non-millennial ears, though I am unfortunately a part of this category. "Have you tried Austin's coffee?" "No, I haven't but I think I know the place you're talking about. They have like open mic nights and poetry right?" "Yeah man that's the one." Both men begin texting as though it had just been created. "Dude I just got the dunkin doughnuts job in Casselberry." "So free doughnuts for life right?" "I wish man, that would sick." A text drives one of the friends out of the conversation. "Allie just tex...

Part 2: a.) The characters I usually write about are more tied to real life and most of them have some kind of struggle. In one story I had a detective that was an alcoholic and had lost his son to tuberculosis. I am drawn to these characters because they are gritty. They have faults which is how actual people are. b.) My characters seem undeveloped in complexity. I would like to have very rich, complex characters but that has always been something I struggle with. f.) I like creating characters out of nothing. Making an entire "person" with words and giving them room to move around in is very interesting. Also the fact that somebody else might read my story and find commonality with the characters would be amazing. Part 3: a.) W. Somerset Maugham was raised in the UK by his uncle. b.) Maugham had a large family. He had 5 other siblings though one died only a day after his birth. The family was also very distinguished with Maugham's father and three uncles be...