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  a.)    Patty thought he could get one over on me, ha. Poor boy was swimming with lead weights. If the job would have gone down as planned the kid would have made some good money too. O'Toole found him trying to get to London. Patty was shot for his betrayal, and O'Toole gave us more money for the trouble. In the end I'm happy with it all. b.) I chose 3rd person so that I can describe things characters could not. I was able to tell backstory and what my character was thinking. I was very comfortable writing in this point of view. This week I read 2 more stories by W. Somerset Maugham. The ant and the grasshopper, and Mr. know all. I really enjoyed the first story since it had tons of tension and great character development. The second story; Mr. know all felt kind of dull when comparing it to The ant and the grasshopper. Both stories were realistic narrative fiction. In both stories there are characters that people do not like. In the ant and the grasshopper ...

1. I feel as though my story is interesting, which to me means that it is working well. 2. What I believe is not working is the language. I always feel as though I need better choice of words to tell my story. A higher level of language. 3. Some questions id like to have answered about my draft are: Is it engaging? Does it read well? Does it have a strong voice? Does my draft have parts that could be made more economical? 4. My characters internal conflict is honestly something I did not think about. I think it would have added to the story. 5. This draft challenged my writing because I tried to use more imagery and include descriptions of the setting to better immerse the reader. I want to focus on better language. A. In reading two stories from my author: The Verger and The Lotus Eater. I thought both stories had beautiful imagery and were very entertaining. I could see what each character was doing throughout the stories. In The Verger I do not have anything that I disl...